The purpose of this proposal is to give some information about two distributors that the company have to choose for have a distributor in Australia.
The first option , Ingram Micro Australia, with over 30 years experience, Ingram Micro is the only global distributor operating in the Asia Pacific region. Ingram Micro differentiates itself from other distributors by offering the broadest array of technology solutions, services and technology support. We also provide partners with valuable insights into new technologies and emerging vertical markets such as virtualisation, mobility, CE and RFID/POS that help generate more sales opportunities.
The second option Solentive, with 15 years experience and clients that include major multinational organizations, Solentive specializes in developing purpose-built software systems for web, desktop, enterprise and handheld platforms with a sharp focus on the client’s business need. Solentive will also act as a reseller in Indonesia, Singapore, Hong Kong, Malaysia, Thailand, and Vietnam. Solentive developed the first production application in Australia using InRule: a property management system for a client with access to more than 800 individual real estate offices in Australia, New Zealand and South East Asia. InRule’s first customer in New Zealand was Fidelity Life, the largest New Zealand-owned and controlled life insurance and investment company.
I have been investigating and could not have found anything that I did not like but I believe that the best option would be Ingram Micro Australia because they have a proposition for assist their resellers for becoming more profitable by identifying market opportunities, enabling our resellers to focus on their core competencies and leverage our capabilities, providing resellers with resources for success, focussing on improving our customers' experience, providing solution-orientated product and service offerings and adding complementary technologies to enhance resellers' competitive advantage.
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ResponderEliminarI think that your composition is very good and I wouldn´t change anything so... I don´t know what to say...
Hello arantxa!
ResponderEliminarIn the title i only would write "proposal to choose a distributor in Australia" without in the country of.
In the introduction i would put it in another way not to repeat the word distributor like for example "The purpose of this proposal is to give some information about two distributors in Australia that the company has to choose"
In the second paragraph, second line(after the coma) I would omit Ingram Micro.
In the third paragraph, second line(after the coma) I would also omit Solentive, because in my point of view in the whole paragraph its too much repeated. You could write the company, this distributor, etc instead of the company's name.
To know the differences between two distributors, I would compare the different characteristics and contrast them instead of describe each other and then explain the reasons you have choose Ingram Micro.
I hope you can use these corrections.